Warrior Princess wrote:I feel nothing but the frosty touch of silver twilight's kiss.
This isn't even a nitpick, just my own warped opinion. I don't like the use of silver before twilight. I understand that you want twilight to be silver and not the kiss but it looks un-aesthetically pleasing right there.
You get what I mean, right? *doesn't know what she's talking about?*
Besides that, fantastic job. I agree with Snoink, you can tell us a little more about her, though I thought your poem ended very nicely.
All in all, great job and keep rhyming.
xxooxx
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